We use the paragraph structure called S.E.E.Y to write factual paragraphs:
(S) A statement.
(E) Elaboration.
(E) Examples or further Elaboration.
(Y) Finish with ‘Your Opinion or feelings’.
We were asked to focus on using correct punctuation and Wow Words!
Here is my writing on Bastion Point which we learnt about in class.
(seey paragraph)
S: Basting Point is a place where Maori got kicked out of their land by the crown.
E: Ngati Whatua gave the crown the land in case Russians attacked.
E:The Russians didn’t attack so Ngati Whatua took the land back but crown wanted to sell the land and that’s how the protest started. It went for a long time (506 days). The Maori got forced out by the police and some Maori got arrested for no particular reason.
Y: Again this is another example of New Zealanders being treated unfairly.
I learnt that Maori were getting kicked out of their home back in the day at Auckland. Mr Maclean’s example of what we could write was a big help to me.
What do you think I could improve on?
Ma te wa, Carter